Blog post feedback?

I'm writing a series of blog posts right now around building privacy friendly applications. I've just wrapped up the draft for part one "How to build a privacy friendly app", part two will be targeted at services/SaaS.

Problem is I'm not very good at writing when it comes to telling a story, I've spent too much time in my life writing code.

Here's the post in its draft state, currently it's hidden in that you need the link to access it https://portabella.io/blog/2021-02-02-how-to-build-app/.

I'd love for feedback on my post and if you want me to take a look at anything you've written (code or otherwise) feel free to drop it here and I'll pay it back.