[Feedback Request] Nobody is working for 8 hours a day, Why?
My recent article on why developers and knowledge workers work an average of 2-4 hours a day.
Please share your feedback and what I can improve.
I am set out to get better at writing, so I'm looking for some critique feedback.
Roast my writing.
Hey - to start with, this is a super interesting subject, thanks for sharing!
There are some grammatical and spelling errors, but overall well done! I would say you could do a better job of outlining the 'why' of your article, and what you are going to talk about. You also say you are going to share your personal experience about what prevents you from being productive, but then you launch into Henry Ford and the industrial revolution, Naval, etc. so that's a bit confusing. You then conclude with how to better measure productivity, which is interesting.
So I think overall it would come together better if you outline the 'why' and 'what' in your intro paragraph, and then sum it up, and remove the part about saying you are going to discuss your personal experiences, because that isn't really the case here.
Awesome job and thanks for sharing here!
Thank you so much for taking the time to share your feedback. I'll check the article and will modify based on your suggestions.
no problem - hope it's helpful!