Landing page experts: How would you improve these landing pages? (roast)
Having seen others get great feedback here on their landing pages, I'd like to throw mine into the mix.
Overall I'm looking for any feedback that you think would improve scroll-down rate and overall conversion rate. I'm purposefully not going to go into detail on what we are, because the landing pages should do a good enough job of that if they are doing their job!
This is our primary one: https://essembi.com/pages/agile-software
This is one we use against the 800lb gorilla in our space: https://essembi.com/pages/jira-alternative
This one is for our special pricing for startups/indies: https://essembi.com/pages/for-startups
Let me know your take, marketing wizards of IndieHackers!
Design/layout wise you should space out things more, leave more empty whitespace don't cram everything
I think you should be looking at how it looks across multiple layout like phone on both alignments
Messaging wise it read like... We are new, we are magic, something new... We are cheap. Ok you are cheap, the rest was word filler
What's the difference between the 2 CTAs? Not clear as a user, could try them side by side
***** Based on, should I know these icons? Is that a weird version of the Android store?
Your entire page seems to try to say we do exactly the same as these other software list combined at a better price, idk if going this indirect route of saying it is better than just saying it, it might be, maybe worth a/b testing with a simple hard version, basically taking the idea of the pricing image and making it the top hero
Is aha! Known to your potential customers? Didn't hear about it