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Trade landing page feedback

I'll provide feedback on your page if you provide some on mine :)

I'm doing consulting to bootstrap product development. I created a landing page. Would love feedback on 2 things:

  • is the copy value-focused enough, or too feature-focused?
  • is anything unclear or too wordy?

https://www.baybridgebio.com/consulting.html

on October 10, 2019
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    It's probably good enough as it is, but you can improve it quite a bit without too much work imo.

    Some things to consider (personal opinions):

    • overall, it doesn't leave much of an impression, and doesn't feel professional enough.

    Once it's in the budget, I would consider hiring an illustrator to do some illustrations to give a consistent brand / feel that stands out a bit more (in place of the standard icons). Biological technical drawings would be interesting. You could maybe find some online that work right now for your hero image or to split up some of the text further down. Not sure if that's easy to find, though.

    In the mean time, you can make it look a bit cleaner (although this will maybe look standard or templated):

    • I would try to get all the icons to be the same color palette. Maybe blue, since that seems easy
    • remove the background (distracting, doesn't add a positive feeling)
    • change button color to something more exciting
    • add a margin to your header bar (left: 260, right: 260) -- currently pulling attention away from middle of screen, uncomfortable for user
    • change p text color to something lighter, like : #4e616c, and your header text to a dark grey/black

    ---

    Hero section:

    • move button underneath text, add a biological technical drawing on the right side

    • change button color to make it more dramatic

    • I would decrease the text

    i.e. hero feature sub-text could be:
    "We help biotech investors find hidden gems and save time"

    "We help biotech startups raise money and grow their business"

    see here: https://imgur.com/a/F3o160Q (I just chose a random google result for the image, no idea what that is... lol)

    ---
    "Biotech ..."

    The two-column text with checkmarks is overwhelming to me

    I would separate the pitch for investors and startups (have a separate horizontal block for each. ). You could add an image next to each to fill up the space instead if necessary

    • You could reduce text here, ie:

    "Investors, we can help:

    technical diligence support for deals $5M+

    find and vet candidates

    process deal flow

    understand a new area and find interesting companies (or start one in house)

    learn more about biotech"

    ---

    "Select past projects"

    Change background -- would just do a light blue

    see here: https://imgur.com/a/dr14LMz

    add a CTA "get the case study" with email address sign up (even if you don't have a case study.. can make one if necessary, otherwise just set up a call)

    ---

    On demand domain expertise

    Change icons to one color, change text color

    see here: https://imgur.com/a/PjpdtO3

    again can cut down the text, i.e.

    "The right expertise for your project"
    "We assemble teams with the expertise you need; academics, experienced industry scientists, attorneys, clinicians and investors."

    "Data-driven insights"
    "Rigorous analysis and evidence-based recommendations. Our executive summaries save you time, and the full chain of evidence lets you dive deeper where necessary."

    ---

    Cheers & good luck

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      Thanks, this is amazing! Am implementing it now. Is there anything I can do to help you?

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        Not at the moment, but thanks for the offer :)

        Looks great, btw.

        Next steps, I would still increase the margin on your nav bar and make the buttons / fonts match your main landing page. But again, not really necessary, just if you have some spare time and want to work on it a bit more.

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    Hi there,

    I think overall the landing page is quite nice. Things I would improve:

    • the dark cloudy thunderstorm background image. I would use a friendlier picture which also has some meaning
    • the part with the check list which starts with the heading "Biotech consulting and research agency serving:" Here I would somehow include some small images so that the user is not only confronted with text
    • the part where you present pictures of yourself: the description texts are not aligned and the images do not fit to each other, because the right one has a white frame and the left one a circular border
    • I would remove this "hover for details" feature, where the card expands. I just find it annoying.

    Best wishes

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      Thanks! Is there a landing page you'd like me to review?

      Do you have any recommendations for stock landing page images? I spent too long looking for the perfect image so just put that one up because I wanted something with texture that wasn't too distracting.

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        Hey yeah sure,
        I woud be happy if you have a look at Turtle (https://turtle.community).
        I like https://pxhere.com/ because they are free of copy rights :)

        You also find more useful landing page tools on Turtle :
        https://turtle.community/topic/landing page

        Best wishes

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          Thanks, the landing page looks good to me. For me the most salient line was about finding "valuable vs viral" content. The most recent tool I looked for was a live chat app, and I couldn't find any objective research around which were the best -- only found content marketing by the developers of these tools.

          I like the landing page tools page you sent. Seeing that example of what your community / site offers helped me "get" the value prop. Maybe helpful to feature a set of tools on your landing page to give the reader a really concrete example of what they get with your product?

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            Thx a lot for the valuable feedback. The idea about featuring a set of tools on the landing page is very nice :)